支招小作文| “看穿柱图”
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分享雅思考试小作文真题范文。每一篇范文都经由专业团队反复校对，最终外教审查定稿。成功就是日复一日那一点点小小努力的积累。
本期小作文供稿：
章 跃
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核心考核点：Compare & Contrast
“同时”：数据统计只统计了2012年一个时间点，而没有别的时间点。
“不同项”：不同年龄段、不同活动。
行文的结构上而言，可以没有conclusion；但是，行文的内容上而言，绝对不可以没有overview。
如果没有conclusion, 就把overview写在introduction里。
教师示范
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bar chart is an illustration of the percentages of Australian children and teenagers, divided by age, doing four activities. Overall, there was diversity among the three age groups, and within each group, the attendance varied from activity to activity. 【vary是雅思小作文必会单词，异常重要。】
通常遵循“General — Specifics原则”
General： Watching TVwas most popular, Specifics: with more than 90 percent of children or teenagersin each group doing this activity, and it is most notable that nearly every individualin the 12-16 group did this activity. 没有机械陈述数据（“98%”），而是“解读”数据对应的“事实”（“nearly every individual”）。决定用“对比”逻辑推进写作：Those high percentagescontrasted sharply withthe low ones in terms of taking art classes, ranging from 40 to 60. ç 描述信息之间的关系。 12-16 groupis noteworthy again, as the lowest figure, representing a low level of likelihood, was among these children and teenagers. At this point, it is apparent that the 12-16 group was distinctive.
注意：1）主语的形式丰富多样；2）状语的形式丰富多样；3）状语可以帮助“集成”信息。
During the same year, within the age range of 9 to 11, 70 percent of the Australians read, and a same proportion of Australians aged between 12 and 16 did the same thing. 措辞难度不在语法或者句型方面，而在说法，写出来像在描述“事件”，而不是机械描述数据。 popularity of this activity was slightly lower in the 5-8 population. In terms of bicycling, Australians were active at obviously different levels, 措辞难度不在语法或者句型方面，而在说法，，写出来像在描述“状态”，而不是机械描述数据。as the figures were in a rather wide范围从60％到82％。
