支招大作文|科技“智”惠小年轻

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支招大作文|科技“智”惠小年轻

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There is increasing use of technology in workplace. Some people find that it is good for young people’s prospects of gaining job and harder for old people.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Without those technological facilities, many jobs wouldnot be done properly in workplace. (设计一个虚拟语气的句子，获取语法方面的分数) So, I think that technology is favorable toyoung people’s career prospects and is disadvantageousfor old.

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Because(语法多样性：状语从句) young people are used to and skilledin using various technologies, savvyenables m to well fit in technology-enabled(“科技赋能的”)workplace. For example, young people use smart phones and many or intelligent devices on an everyday basis（“日常地”）, and this(指代一个句子所描述的情况)becomes advantage when ir jobs require use of se devices. 设置人群之间的对比关系The opposite is case of old. Many of those state-of--art (“高级的”)technologies may be unfamiliar to(注意此处用法的介词是to) old. Therefore, old may be clumsyin modern workplace and work slowly.

Second, since(语法多样性：状语从句) commandof technology requires having a sharp mind, whichis an important characteristic of many young people, increasing use of technology is relatively easy for young. The strong learning ability of young people enables m to quickly grasp se ever-advancing technologies. The use of technology is refore an opportunity for young to fully utilize(使…发挥作用)ir capability. 设置人群之间的对比关系This is not case of老年人，他们的工作能力主要取决于我们的经验，而不是快速的头脑。技术无论如何都要求头脑敏捷，这对老人们是不利的。过时的可能是在和尴尬的情况下，（语法多样性：同位语从句） y忙于学习不断更新的技术从来没有真正赶上。