雅思大作文范文分析-讨论讨论类
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大家好又是一篇9分考官Simon的范文分析分享给大家，这一次我们选择了大热话题-教育类，常考题型-双边分析。先来和我一起审一下题目吧。
Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
审题注意点：
1.university students – 注意论证主体是大学生，切记不可写着写着就变成泛泛的在说学生了，要随时想着大学生的特点是什么，如面临就业等。像“增强逻辑，增强辩证性思维，丰富知识”等等这样的点，在写的时候要思考，是不是大学生特别需要的，是不是大学阶段特有的特点，是不是中学，小学生也适用，这样才能观点有说服力，且紧扣主题。
2.like vs. useful – 本题是要我们论证兴趣导向还是实用导向，那么也就是既要写出兴趣导向的好处也要写出就业导向的好处，很多小伙伴们觉得想不出观点，在写的时候记住我们之前文章中给大家提到的，按不同的角度发散性思考观点，比如考虑到：学生本人，社会，国家三个角度的话，你就会发现观点丰富起来（如：可以写为社会各行业输送人才，更好的促进国家经济发展，解决就业率低下等等）。
3.science and technology- 注意本题在有用的职业这里给出了例子，给出了一个科技领域，不少同学会困惑，这个例子我是不是要写在文章中呢，不写会不会算跑题，如果写，写到什么程度？- 这里给大家一个明确的答复- 要写，如果你能够想到一些科技领域工作的例子，你可以写出来做举例论证支撑观点；如果你一时半会想不到科技领域内的任何例子，那么至少把science and technology这三个词，在文章中提及1-2次，这样就会比较保险， 一定不会因此而出现偏题丢分啦。
好啦，分析了这么半天，咱们一起来看看考官是怎么写的吧：
People have different views about how much choice（你看，这个how much 用的就特别好，how much表示对于程度的一个询问，也就对应了题目中所说的whatever they like 及 should only be allowed to）students should have with regard to(就…而言） what they can study at university. While some argue that it would be better for（比较级） students to be forced （force替换 only be allowed to） into certain key subject areas, I believe that everyone should be able to study the course of their choice.（ while 句子用来写其中一方人物的观点，后一句写自己的观点）
There are various reasons why people believe that universities should only offer subjects that will be useful in the future（主题句-第一方观点论证段) They may assert that university courses like medicine, engineering and information technology（举例-例子中包含science and technology） are more likely to be beneficial than certain art degrees. From a personal perspective, it can be argued that these courses provide more job opportunities, career progression, better salaries（好词）,and therefore an improved quality of life for students who take them（给点同时论证出结果- 语法：形式主语+主语从句）. On the societal level, by（by doing) forcing people to choose particular university subjects, governments can ensure that any knowledge and skill gaps in the economy are covered（词汇搭配）. Finally, a focus on technology in higher education could lead to new inventions, economic growth, and greater future prosperity(好词）.（个人角度+社会角度论证）
In spite of these arguments, I believe that university students should be free to choose their preferred areas of study（主题句-第二方观点-作者自己观点）. In my opinion, society will benefit more if our students are passionate about（好词：对…感兴趣） what they are learning. Besides, nobody can really predict which areas of knowledge will be most useful to society in the future, and it may be that employers begin to value creative thinking skills above practical or technical skills. If this were the case, perhaps we would need more students of art, history and philosophy than of science ortechnology（再次提及science and technology – 虚拟-未来预测，可能性）.
In conclusion, although it might seem sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful subjects, I personally prefer the current system in which people have the right to study whatever they like. （ 再次表态）
仔细品读本文的观点表述（逻辑），句型以及词汇，并对这篇文章进行背诵及仿写可以帮助大家短期内快速提升雅思写作能力哦。时间不够的考生们也不用担心，和以前一样，我们依然把本文的逻辑句型框架整理出来供大家背诵套用：
开头段：People have different views about …. with regard to ….. .While some argue第一方观点, I believe 第二方观点（或你的观点）.
主体段：There are various reasons why people believe that …反方观点… They may assert that …反方观点的论证.... From a personal perspective, it can be argued that 论证展开…and therefore …... On the societal level, by（by doing)……sb. can ensure that……. Finally,…. could lead to….（此处注意，我们不一定要写3个观点，给出2个观点论证就可以-finally后面可以不要）
In spite of these arguments, I believe that…第二方观点/你的观点…. In my opinion, sb. will benefit more if…分论点1论证…. Besides, it may be…….. If this were the case, perhaps we would need …..分论点2论证
结尾段：In conclusion, although it might seem sensible for..反方观点….., I personally prefer … 自己观点….
