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In modern age, some people think is unnecessary to teach children the skill of handwring.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction

People no longer hand wre anything except their signatures, and actually,this(指代词的使用，是建立行文脉络的关键，这里的this指代前一句所陈述的情况。) is a py. Although typing has undeniable benefs, handwring should be taught and learned.(三言两语的开头段落，信息紧凑高效，节奏不拖沓，是雅思大作文开头段落的上上策。)

Body

Handwring is art andaesthetics(“美学”), as can becalligraphy(“书法”).There is no denying that the keyboard works wh higher efficiency and arguably better accuracy than does a pen or pencil.→让步让步，勿忘让步，不是必需，但是推荐，让步这一话术，让自己的论证更全面平衡客观理性。) Considering thisdefense(“辩护”)of the opponents to handwring, we obviously do not teach our children to hand wre essays or anything in great length,→ 进一步，是为了后面的转折做准备。)and instead, the skill isfostered(“培养”)as anartistic(“艺术性的”) skill. The skill is developed as is about cultivation rather thanutily(“功能”). Children wh good calligraphy or learning calligraphy may haveexquise(“讲究的”)taste.

Second, good handwring is aboutcommand (“掌控”).Skillful(“熟练的”)use of muscles and the wring instrument, eher a pen or a pencil takes strength andcoordination(“协调”), and the control of mind is not easy. Children, in learning handwring, learns to when torestrain(“约束”) and when to let go. It is found that a child who has pleasant handwring has anadorable (“讨喜的”)character (“人格”), because thechild has learned to manage his or her emotions and behavior through wring by hand, which requires expression andreservation(“收敛”)of himself or herself in different times and circumstances.→ 这一段讨论的理由就不设置让步啦，自己的道理一气贯通下来。)

Conclusion

At this point, we may be aware that teaching children the skill of handwring is notfor the sake ofwring but for higher purposes. There is the py that handwring has beenremoved(“移除”) from the curriculum of so many schools. It would be a greater py if handwring as a subject will no longer be available in more schools.→最后两句话的内容是一种写作设计，体会一下，从现实说到虚拟，重复以强调py。)